The Missing Librarian Who May or May Not Be Lying Dead in the Burned Library
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As you might know, we had to write a mystery for school. Now, mysteries were never really my thing as I could never wait long enough to find out who really did it so I would read the last page right away and if the answer wasn't on the last page, I'd read the last chapter and so on. I'm not very patient with mysteries as you can see, but I'd have to say for me, writing one is more fun than reading one. This is probably the worst thing I've ever written but I was surprised that I actually did that well on it! Mysteries are so hard to write though. There are so many plot holes you need to watch out for and other things you need to take account of! I wrote this entire thing (five pages single spaced) last night and so tonight I'm basically just relaxing as my brain is still recovering. I would love your critiques and other constructive criticism but please don't be too mean and enjoy! S
orry for the double spaces I can't figure out how to take that off on blogger and whenever I try to do it on my original writing it glitches weirdly!..... :P
As you might know, we had to write a mystery for school. Now, mysteries were never really my thing as I could never wait long enough to find out who really did it so I would read the last page right away and if the answer wasn't on the last page, I'd read the last chapter and so on. I'm not very patient with mysteries as you can see, but I'd have to say for me, writing one is more fun than reading one. This is probably the worst thing I've ever written but I was surprised that I actually did that well on it! Mysteries are so hard to write though. There are so many plot holes you need to watch out for and other things you need to take account of! I wrote this entire thing (five pages single spaced) last night and so tonight I'm basically just relaxing as my brain is still recovering. I would love your critiques and other constructive criticism but please don't be too mean and enjoy! S
orry for the double spaces I can't figure out how to take that off on blogger and whenever I try to do it on my original writing it glitches weirdly!..... :P
Oh and click on the "read more >>" below to read my mystery! Sorry for the inconvenience but it is also inconvenient for one post to take up so much space, lol.
~July
~July
The
Missing Librarian Who May or May Not Be Lying Dead in the Burned
Library
*The
Love Triangle*
16
months ago
Twenty
two year old Belle
Maurice was standing on the corner of Applebrooke and Fulton and
experiencing the most uncomfortable silence in her whole life.
Alongside her was her boyfriend, well ex-boyfriend now, Jack. They
were waiting for the public bus to come and pick them up because his
car was in the repair shop as he had recently crashed it into a tree
just outside of town after falling asleep in his car because he was
out too late doing “who knows what?”.
Belle
just had one of the most difficult conversations of her life with
Jack Hookmen, she had just officially told him it was over. This had
happened a few times before, but they just called it “taking a
break” then. Now it was truly over. Belle made a pact with herself
to never get back together with him because every time she got her
hopes up, her heart was crushed when she saw Jack flirting with other
girls at coffee shops or stores around town.
It
was the same every time: her mind told her no and that it would never
work out, but her heart screamed yes!
Just
as the bus pulled up to the curb, the gathering clouds started to
leak and they put on the most coruscating lights display, and Belle
stepped on and never looked back on her decision that day because her
prince was yet to come.
*Belle's
Prince Charming*
12
months ago
Belle
stood behind the counter of the nearly empty coffee shop she was
employed at with her nose stuck in the new Polly Brighton novel that
just came out. She glanced at the clock hanging on the wall. The
hands seemed to move the slowest when she was waiting for someone!
“Ten
more minutes!” she said to herself.
He
hadn't always been a regular customer, but lately he had been coming
in more often, always at the same time, always ordering the same
drink, always sitting in the same seat by the counter. Often times,
he would also buy an identical coffee for Belle.
Ten
minutes passed and the familiar bell clanged on the door signaling a
customer. Belle's head snapped up to see the person who always put a
smile on her face when she having a dark day.
“Belle,
how are you?” William Gold asked.
“Hey,
Will! I'm alright, how about you?”
“I'm
about to be much better.”
Belle
laughed, slightly confused, but brushed it off. “Do you want to
usual?”
“Not
today, but go ahead and make something for yourself, on me.”
“You
don't want anything? What's up with you?”
“Belle,
I've wanted to ask you this for a long time but I've just now gotten
up the courage....” William paused and took a deep breath.
“Will,
spit it out!”
“Will
you come out on a date with me tonight? I mean, just a movie and some
pizza, nothing too special,” his tongue spit out the last sentence.
“Aww,
William Gold! I would love to!” Belle reached across the counter
and hugged him.
“I'll
pick you up at seven then?” his voice dripped with the sound of his
relief.
Belle
nodded ok, and they exchanged addresses. Right after her shift
finished, Belle rushed home to prepare herself for her very first
date after her breakup with Jack.
*The
Mystery of the Burned Down Library*
Present
Day
“William
is taking me out for Chinese food after work tonight for another
date!” Belle smiled and she thought back to that first date with
William Gold and decided she wouldn't've changed anything about it!
If she'd said no, so many things wouldn't have happened in her life.
Will's
father funded and built the library in their town and now that he was
retired, he gave Belle the head position there so she could quit her
job at the coffee house and have a job that she enjoyed. The library
was the town's pride and joy. It was their spirit and the thing they
were known for! The architecture was beautiful and it had the largest
collection and variety of books in the whole state.
She'd
had some of the happiest times of her life with Will, he made her
laugh and was her brightness in the hard days.
Now
that he was her fiance, she looked forward to the rest of her life
and could move on from her shady past.
Belle
walked outside to her car, a spring in her step. She was headed to
her favorite job, a place where she could escape from everyday life
for a little bit. The library.
***
William
had been parked outside Belle's house waiting for her to come out for
ten minutes she still hadn't come out! Will jammed his hand into his
pockets, searching for his iphone and once he found it, he sent Belle
a quick text.
“Where
is she?” he said to himself after getting no reply.
He
climbed out of his car and walked up to the front door which, he
discovered, was locked, so he concluded that there might have been a
miscommunication and she might be waiting for him at the library
where all cell phones must be silenced.
He
got back into his car and about a block away from it, he saw smoke
rising from the approximate
location of the library! He gunned the car and sped the rest of the
way down.
“What's
going on?” he asked Officer Graham who was speaking in a radio with
the chief of the fire department.
The
library was engulfed in flames that lit up the pitch black sky and
smoke was pouring out the windows.
“It
looks like the library caught fire, either a total accident or on
purpose, but thankfully it was closed so no one was in there.”
“My
Belle might have been in there! We have to look!” Will nearly
screamed at the man then dashed forward.
“No!
No one can go in there. It is impossible to survive!” Graham
grabbed his arm and held him.
“You
can't just let her burn!”
“If
she was in there, she'd already be dead. We'll investigate when it is
safe to go in but right now, if you go in you'll be sentencing
yourself to death. You don't even know she's in there anyway.”
“I'd
rather die than live without my Belle!” William burst and ran back
to his car.
***
A
few days later, Will's cell phone rang with the number of Officer
Graham showing up.
“Did
you find anything?” Will asked eager for any information about
Belle.
“Not
yet, we just got clearance to go in and search. You are welcomed to
come as well, but I would advise against it.”
“No,
I'll come, I'll be over there in a few minutes.”
Will
was both terrified and excited because today he would finally find
out the fate of his fiance.
***
As
the team of investigators searched the the remains of the charred
library, William stood by and prayed for a someone to say that it was
clear and that nothing had been found.
“Officer
Graham!” one team member yelled, “I think there's something here
you need to see!”
Graham
glanced over at William Gold, saw his look of utter panic, then
climbed through the trash heap towards the team.
When
William saw the look on Graham's face, he knew that things were not
good. Graham handed a black bag to the team and they started putting
several burned objects into it while Graham made his way back over to
Will.
“William,
this is the hardest part of my job and most definitely the worst. We
found some bones.”
Will
gasped and teared up.
“But
hope is not lost! We'll do some tests on them to see who's bones they
really are.”
“I
need to go,” Will choked. He knew if he heard anymore he'd lose it
completely in front of the officer. He needed to go to Belle's house.
***
Officer
Graham was sure that Belle Maurice was dead. There was no possible
way she could've have survived that fire unless she had some kind of
super power. However, the search wasn't over. They still needed to
search for other clues to figure out what even started the fire!
Graham
walked to the back of the rubbled mess and discovered a purple back
pack that was sitting lodged in between two trees in the forest
behind the once beautiful library. He put his gloves on and unzipped
the zippers revealing empty gas cans and a box of matches. At that
moment, he figured out that this had been intentional. Somebody had
wanted the library burned down, although he couldn't imagine who!
After
he brought the backpack to his cruiser, he took another trip to the
back woods where he
found
another vital clue. Huge tire tracks in the dirt led away from town.
The tire tracks made him think of something that no one had thought
of yet which was the question of where Belle's car was. It wasn't in
front of the library so it must be either at her house or..... had
she started the fire herself and left?
“Why
would she do that? Why?.... why?.... why?.....” he puzzled himself
as he climbed into his cruiser to head to Belle's house. He did
recall her saying a few months ago that she felt trapped in this town
and that nothing was worth staying here for so maybe burning down the
library was her way of freeing herself from any ties she had here!
For the moment, Belle was the number one suspect on his list.
When
he arrived at his destination, he found William sitting in his car
with his head in his hands and Graham invited him to walk up to the
door with him. They walked up to the side door by the garage together
and first off, Graham, tried the handle but it remained locked
tightly.
“Hold
on, let me get my lock picker thing from my car,” Graham said.
Will
looked toward the ground in despair once again. He glanced back up
before his mind could completely register that his eye had landed on
something lying on the ground. Will snapped his eyes back and picked
up a small sticky note off the ground.
“Will,
Can you please pick me up at the library? I forgot to feed Pongo so I
need to go back and do that. Love you and thanks!”
“Officer!”
Will raised his voice, “I found something!”
Graham
came back over and scanned the note, his eyes widening.
“We
were supposed to go on a date that night and I waited for her here
but never saw the note! I just assumed she was at the library because
that is her favorite place in the world.”
“So
it's possible that those bones we found could be Pongo's bones, not
human bones?”
“Yes,
I guess it is,” Will agreed.
“Those
tests will be done tomorrow, so very soon we'll have our answer.”
They
moved on to the garage and saw that her car was gone, but Graham
didn't want to break Will's hear with his other theory just yet.
***
The
next day Will's phone rang again and he picked up to hear Graham
telling him that it was confirmed that the bones were Pongo's, and
not human.
“Is
there any possible way that Belle could've set the fire to get out of
this town? To cut any ties she had here?” Graham finally shared his
other idea.
“No,
it's impossible. She loved the library too much! Plus I know she
wouldn't even consider leaving me.”
“Well,
what do you think happened?”
“I
think I know who did it. I think it was Jack Hookmen. He was Belle's
ex-boyfriend and he's still very jealous and in love with her. He's
been trying to get his revenge on me ever since I proposed. Anyway, I
saw him at the coffee shop on the morning of the fire, but after that
no one had seen him until today and he was looking extraordinarily
cheerful.”
“So?
He could just be out of town.”
“His
car is in the garage again because he dented it up again. He couldn't
leave. Plus Jim at the gas station told me that Jack came in on the
morning of the fire and bought two huge cans of gas and a big box of
matches. It had to have been him, everyone else here adores my Belle!
I think he burned the library to get his revenge on me!”
Graham
was shocked, “How did you come up with all of that?”
“I've
had a lot of time to think. He wanted to burn the library to get
revenge on me, but what he
didn't
count on was someone being at the library. Remember, it was supposed
to be closed but she forgot to feed Pongo so she had to go back.
Pongo was blind and deaf so she couldn't get him out fast
enough,
but Belle was able to come out of the library when she smelled smoke
and see Jack. Jack knew that there couldn't be any witnesses so when
Belle ran to her car and tried to drive away, Jack pushed her out of
the drivers seat and kidnapped her.”
“This
is brilliant! It matches up with everything. But where is she?”
“That's
easy. All you have to do is follow the tire tracks!”
Graham
stood there open-mouthed. Will's theory was absolutely brilliant and
he knew he, himself, never could have come up with this so fast.
Both
men took the cruiser down to the scene of the fire and followed the
tracks about an hour through the woods to a small, rundown cabin
where the tracks went no further. William was the first one out of
the car and bolted to the front door. He knocked it right off its
hinges and the first thing he saw was Belle gagged and tied to a
chair in the corner, passed out.
Graham
followed him through the door and before he could do anything, Will
cut her bindings slid the gag off her mouth.
“Belle!”
he whispered. “Please wake up!” He kissed her lips for at least
thirty seconds and as he came up for a breath, Belle's eyes flickered
open.
“Will?
Is it you?” she moaned through cracked, dry lips.
“Yes,”
Will laughed, “I've missed you so much, I thought you were dead.”
“I
know, I'm sorry,” Belle said.
“What
happened?” Officer Graham said.
“Can
I get something to eat and drink first?” Belle asked. She hadn't
had much fluid or protein for days.
“Of
course,” Officer Graham said.
The
three clambered out of the cabin and Will and Graham helped Belle
into the car. They took her back to the station where she had a
bottle of water and a small bowl of lime jello with pears.
After
a bit of Belle's strength had returned, she started telling her
story. The story almost mirrored Will's theory but it was filled with
much more detail because she had experienced it first hand. “It
was Jack,” she concluded.
“We
know. Well, actually you just confirmed what we already were ninety
percent sure about. You should be very proud of your fiance though,
because he figured that all out and he was completely correct!”
Graham
drove over to Jack's house and took him back to the station where he
was questioned and after many lies and denials, he finally admitted
what he did. His court date to decide what his punishment would be
was set for the day of William and Belle's wedding.
*The
Wedding Day*
William
and Belle Gold made their commitments to each other, both were
sporting shiny rings that would always remind them of their
everlasting love for each other. There were many other gifts for the
couple but the most memorable one was from an anonymous donor that
gave them the funds to rebuild the library and restore the town to
it's former glory.
When
they arrived home, they saw a box on the front porch from Officer
Graham. There was a little piece of paper attached that told them
that Jack would be spending fifteen years in prison and after that,
he would have to do an additional seven years of supervised community
service. The final paragraph of the note bid them well wishes for
their honeymoon and to enjoy the contents of the box.
Belle
slid the bow off and opened the box revealing the most adorable face
of a little dalmatian puppy similar to Pongo! Since Pongo had died in
the fire, Graham gave the a new puppy to fill the empty spaces in the
soon-to-be-built library.
The
puppy shot out of the box and bolted into the front door. “Ohhh!
He's adorable! I'll name him Missile!” Belle laughed as they
followed the spunky pup inside.
“Bet
he'll never be adorable as you!” William said as he shut the door
closing the world behind them.
Yay so excited to read this! I am going to post my comments as I read it.
ReplyDelete-"They were waiting for the public bus to come and pick them up because his car was in the repair shop as he had recently crashed it into a tree just outside of town after falling asleep in his car because he was out too late doing “who knows what?”." This feels like a run on sentence. Not only that but does him crashing his car because he fell asleep that pertinent to the story?
-Usually if a body is burned they aren't going to find bones, but rather a burned corpse.
-I feel like you just threw Officer Graham at us. Maybe make him sitting at the coffee shop when Will first asks her out to show that Graham knows Belle personally. Otherwise I am really confused on how he knows that Belle was saying that she wanted to leave the town.
-Lock picker thing doesn't sound like something a cop would say. He would just say lock pick. And I don't think he can pick the lock into her house because that is breaking and entering seeing as he doesn't have a warrant.
-Does Pongo live at the library by himself? Like is he locked in there when the library is closed and all that? Maybe she was a little spacey that day and forgot to bring Pongo home when she left the library and was on her way back to get him?
-"Graham didn't want to break Will's hear with his other theory just yet." - I think you meant heart?
-"when she smelled smoke and see Jack" - I think you meant saw?
I really hope I helped! I hope I wasn't mean. You did a really great job with this! Especially since you don't like reading mysteries.
Kylie
Wow Kylie thanks! You were a huge help and no, you weren't mean :) After reading your critiques, I found a lot of things I could have been more specific on or clarified more. Thanks!
DeleteI'll try to answer your questions the best I can anyway though.
First of all, I know it was a run on sentence, but I felt like I was happy enough with the way the sentence was so I didn't rewrite it when I edited because my brain was half dead. I was also trying to show a little bit of why Belle was breaking up with him without going into too much detail.
About the burned bones..... Well let's just say that I'm not an expert on that subject and thought that that was an ok idea :P
Officer Graham doesn't really personally know Belle. Although he knows who she is, they don't really talk much other than the occasional "hello's or how are you's". The way he knew that she wanted to leave town was just from the public gossip of a small town.
Lock picker thing is just more fun to say ;D I see where you're going with the breaking and entering thing, however, he is the head officer and is working on an investigation so he's ok. If it was a regular pedestrian breaking into the house, then it would be breaking and entering.
Pongo does live at the library and the librarians take care of him. Just like sometimes cats do. He's just always been there as long as anyone can remember!
And yes, you are right about the typos... oops! Haha.
Thanks again!
I totally get about mystery books. I just think they go on for a bit, right?
ReplyDeleteYES! I agree.....
DeleteFirst off, I totally called the kidnap library burning down. No offense, but it needed more details. I loved it, and you used the names from Once Upon A Time didn't you? Gold, Belle, Grahm and Hookman is captain hook right? Just a guess, but that sounds like you.
ReplyDeleteNice work! Let's remember I wrote this entire thing in one night without reading it through a single time. I only read it through the next day after it was due so I realize that it is not the most brilliant work I've written.
DeleteAnd yes, I did borrow a few names from OUAT.....
It was a really good mystery, and I TOTALLY CALLED IT!!!!!!!!! Both the names and the ending. It was good, and I want to write a mystery, any pointers?
DeleteHmmmm.... My main thing I could say would be not to forget about evidence and to make sure that you leave no loopholes whatsoever.... Much harder said than done! :D
Deletewhoa, Kylie beat me to it. but other than those boo boos you did an amazing job, especially for writing it all down on one day. And without reading mystery books? Wow, Sis. Congratulations. I was into the story. :D
ReplyDeleteAww, thanks, Hilda!
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