December 08, 2014

A Poem by July: A Man I Knew

Hello guysssss! So this is just going to be a quick post for y'all tonight because I still have to do my homework! 
Anyway, in my English class at school, we're working on a writing unit, and today we had to look at a whole bunch of different poem titles, pick one, and without reading the poem that goes with it, write our own poem based on the title. I chose the title "A Man I Knew" and I just thought I'd share it's rough draft with you! Please note that I am extremely inexperienced in poetry, and this hasn't been through much revision, so give me a little grace :)
Here goes nothing. 

A Man I Knew


my mind often wanders to the strong, yet equally soft man I knew
the taste of him tickles my lips
the familiar smell of cinnamon reminds my nose of him
I remember how his rough hands against mine felt like sandpaper on already smoothed wood
my ears still hear the sound of his voice, humming to himself as he worked on his truck
and my legs still remember how they hung off of the rusty truck’s tailgate
I can still see him
the way his eyes looked into mine on those starry nights gazing up at the heavens with him
both of us lying side by side on dusty blankets in the bed of the truck
my heart still remembers the unexplainable joy I felt when he asked me to marry him
and when I said yes and he embraced me in his strong arms
but my heart still hurts for him, the man I used to know
the day before the wedding I got the call saying he had been killed in a car accident
was like a black muddy pit impossible to climb out of
but he died doing what he loved

joyriding along those country roads in his grandpa’s old truck like a graceful racer

Feel free to give me some feedback: what I did well, and what I could have done better. I would love to hear what you think!

Mischief Managed,
Julllllllyyyyy

8 comments:

  1. I like it, and that's adorable! 'Bout anyone I know? ;p

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    1. Shanks :) Alas, no. I haven't been engaged haha.

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  2. beautiful poem beautiful post!! your blog is really interesting my dear!! Im following you of course!! hope you can visit mine and follow me as well! kisses!

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    1. Thank you Theano :) I am following you now as well. Thank you so much for following me!

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  3. Its so beautiful. I used to write some too, m too bad at it :(

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    1. Thank you! I'm sure you weren't bad at it! You should start again :)

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  4. Love it love it love it. You should do more poetry, I think this piece is amazing.

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    1. Thank you! That really means a lot, maybe I will try some more :)

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Hello there! Thanks so much for dropping by my little corner of the blogosphere. I'd really appreciate if you could give me a follow as well *hint, hint* These "about-me's" are literally the hardest things to write, but I'll have a go at it. You can call me July, or really whatever else floats your boat. I live in a very culturally proud little town that borders beautiful beaches, giving us fun for both summer and winter such as swimming, tanning, boating, skiing, ice-fishing, ice-berg walking, and gorgeous sunsets on the beach year-round. I hope to make it through high school and head off to college for, well, I don't know yet, but whatever it is, it'll be something I love. Robotics, books, movies, and music of all genres are kinda my thing. I would basically consider myself to be one of those stereotypical girls who fall desperately in love with fictional boys... I have a strange obsession with tea drunken from cute elephant mugs. So grab a cuppa and strap yourselves in for some brilliant stuff coming soon!